As the saying goes, an article should be a true expression of the author's inner feelings. However, in the usual composition training, students' "second-hand" fake compositions such as plagiarism, imitation and copying abound, and there are still many students whose compositions are disease-free, but few really feel. The composition of some classes seems to be summarized into several versions, with the same content and no real feelings at all.
Tolstoy said that excellent writers write with their own flesh and blood, and sincere articles flow from the author's heart, not forced out. Only when you really move your feelings can you write something with true feelings.
Life is the source of composition, and truth comes from life. Be sincere to life, don't cheat life, because life itself is real.
So how do students write their true feelings? For the usual teaching practice, the author summarizes the following points: First, feel life and cultivate emotions in life. Ye Shengtao said: "Writing is inseparable from life, and to what extent life is rich, what articles will be made." Mr. Ye Shengtao also said: "Life is like a source, and articles are like a stream. The source is abundant and inexhaustible, and the stream naturally flows. "
Mr. Ye Shengtao's words vividly illustrate the relationship between life and composition. If you want to grasp the "flow" of composition training, you must draw nutrition and materials from the "source" of life.
Therefore, if students want to write their true feelings in their composition, they must be taught to face the society, pay attention to life, observe the objective things around them with full enthusiasm and their own unique eyes and perspectives, establish feelings, and then integrate these feelings into their writing and write their own unique experiences, so that the articles written will not be sentimental and infectious. Many things happen every day in life, of course, big and small, important and unimportant, and even some things seem unremarkable. If we don't savor them carefully, maybe they will leave no trace, resulting in nothing to write and say when writing.
Therefore, teachers should guide students to be conscientious people and feel life with their heart. Everything has been carefully pondered and tasted, and I often feel the same with my relatives, friends, teachers and classmates.
Thinking about problems and looking at things from another angle often leads to many unexpected gains. In order to enable students to collect writing materials from life and write articles with true feelings, the author has asked every student to write a weekly diary since the seventh grade. The content of the weekly diary must be selected from life, and the teacher's proposition can also let students play freely and write the most impressive things this week.
After three years of uninterrupted training, reviewing Zhou Ji has become a pleasure for the author, because the students' true temperament and feelings have been fully revealed in their works, and some students with good Chinese foundation have also tried to create immature novels. Every time I arrange a weekly diary, I carefully choose topics, pay attention to students' lives and inner feelings, and strive to let students have something to write and express every time.
Practice has proved that only by selecting materials from life and letting students tell the truth and express their true feelings in their compositions can students be willing to write, love writing and make writing a part of their spiritual life, which is also an experience for students to learn to be human. Of course, it is not easy for students to write good articles with true feelings.
Teachers should cultivate students' good habit of reading more and thinking more, and guide students to be conscientious in life. Our writing teaching should be close to students' real life, stimulate students' inner experience, and let students write articles with true feelings. The author believes that our writing teaching can only make students grasp the bottom line of expressing their true feelings, so that writing can truly become a spiritual means for students to enrich their emotions, examine themselves and improve themselves.
Second, the cultivation of writing skills After you have the writable life materials, the key to writing a good article full of true feelings lies in mastering certain writing skills and artistically processing the materials. There are many ways to process materials. First, we should make rational use of the incident, select the most typical and representative links in the case as the key points to write in detail, slightly write the minor links, and simply don't write those that have nothing to do with the center.
The skill of writing lies in precision, not richness. You can't pile up materials at will, you should make bold choices and delete useless and redundant pen and ink without mercy. Second, we should properly pave the way and render.
If the same thing happens on different occasions and in different backgrounds, it will often have different results, and the effect of writing may be very different. This requires us to create the necessary premise or environment for the event.
For example, in Zhu Ziqing's essay "The Back", the plot of his father buying oranges makes people cry, because the author depicts this detail in the background of repeated misfortunes at home, and his father's affection for getting a calf is vividly on the paper. While successfully paving the way, don't forget that proper scenery description can often render the atmosphere and subtly contrast the psychology of the characters.
Third, the comprehensive use of various descriptive methods to shape the characters. A successful character image must be flesh and blood, he is an individual in our life, and he should be fully presented to readers.
Through the portraits, language, movements, psychology, demeanor and many other aspects of the characters, readers can feel a vivid and fleshy image. Of course, when describing, we should try our best to grasp the characteristics of the characters and show distinctive personality. Only with personality can there be vitality.
When we comment on the composition, we usually look at the works of some excellent students or think that there are some typical problems in a certain aspect. When reading students' works, do we respect students' personal wishes?
The author always looks at students' works from the perspective of appreciation, regardless of the level, after all, it is the students' painstaking efforts. Third, encourage and affirm that students have the materials and skills to write true feelings in their compositions. What teachers should do is to encourage students to write more true feelings. Even if he has only one sentence or a word worth reading, we should begin to evaluate it by appreciating his sentence or a word.
Never comment on students' personality when evaluating. We should respect every child, appreciate every child and take care of them gently.
2. How to write "true feelings" in composition In this class, we will "touch the heartstrings with true feelings" to make the composition show the charm of true feelings. 2. Clear learning objectives: (students reading) 1. Teach students to observe life with perceptual eyes and experience the taste of life with their own hearts; 2. Be good at capturing emotional points and learn to describe real and delicate details; 3. Improve the ability to master the language and learn to express your true feelings and understanding in your own words. 3. To understand what detail description is is to grasp the subtle and specific typical plots in life or some small things with artistic expression. Some subtle behaviors and actions of characters, as well as scene fragments. There is no doubt that vivid and meticulous description has a direct effect on expressing the feelings of the characters. 4. comparative reading (reading examples to talk about feelings) I asked my father to go back first, and he said he would go to the opposite platform to quench my thirst. I saw him trudging across the railway and buying some oranges, and my tears came down. My father is very kind to me. My father gave me the orange and left, and my tears came again. Students speak freely. I said, "Dad, you go." He looked out of the car and said, "I'll buy some oranges." You stay here. Don't walk around. " I think there are several vendors outside the fence of the platform over there waiting for customers to walk to the platform over there. They must cross the railway, jump down and climb up. My father is a fat man. It will naturally take some trouble to get there. I wanted to go, but he refused. Wearing a big black jacket and a dark blue cotton robe, it is not difficult to hobble to the railway and lean down slowly, but it is not easy for him to climb the platform over there when he crosses the railway. He climbed up with both hands and his feet shrank again. His fat body leans slightly to the left, showing signs of hard work. At this time, I saw his back, and my tears quickly flowed down. I quickly wiped away my tears for fear that he would see me and others would look out again. When he walked back across the railway with his scarlet orange in his arms, he first scattered the orange on the ground, climbed down slowly by himself, and then picked it up. When he and I came here, I quickly helped him to the car and put the oranges together. Write it over there! "I watched him go out. He took a few steps, turned to see me and said, "Go in, there's no one inside. "His back was mixed in the crowds coming and going. I couldn't find it, so I came in and sat down. Tears came again. Teacher's transition: the true and delicate detail description has always been very touching. If Zhu Ziqing's Back is touching, it is that my father staggered across the railway and climbed onto the platform to "buy oranges" for me. Then Luo Zhongli's oil painting "Father" drew the head of an old farmer who was ready to drink water with a sea bowl (1980, Luo Zhongli was a student of Sichuan Academy of Fine Arts when he created the oil painting "Father", and this work participated in the Sichuan Youth Art Exhibition at that time, and "Father" was recognized by many judges of China Youth Art Exhibition. Then "Father" was awarded the first prize (slide show). An old bronze face is full of rutted wrinkles honed by years. On this wrinkled face, the smile seems so reluctant and helpless. He has an old tea bowl in his hand. How many rice noodles and how many soybean sorghum he created with his plowed hands! Behind him is a piece of golden sweat. 5. How can the secret of success (group discussion and communication) capture the details of life? Student 1: Observe life with your heart and feel life with your heart. Student 2: To be a person with a conscience in life, never let go of every little shot of life. Student 3: Pay attention to accumulation. If there is anything moving in life, you should write it down in the form of a diary, so that you won't forget the teacher's sentence: several students speak very well, and every bit of life is the material for our writing. How to start with details and describe real feelings with real and vivid details? 1. Observe things carefully. 2. Choose typical details. 3. Carefully choose your words. 4. Clever use of rhetoric. Student 1. List the details of life that happened to him and filter out the most worthwhile details. Student 2. Describe the details from multiple angles and levels. Student 3. Write the seemingly ordinary details of life concretely and vividly. Student 4. Pay attention to writing your true feelings. Clever use of various rhetorical methods, the teacher said: well said, as long as we carefully observe life, we will find that there are many small things in life that can be written. If you can grasp the real and vivid details as much as possible when writing, you can freeze and enlarge them, use various techniques to make the details real, concrete and vivid, try to show the truth in the details, and at the same time express your experiences, knowledge and feelings in the most beautiful language. Then our composition will be successful. 6. Capture the emotional moment (true confession) Through the analysis of the details in these materials, we find that the magic of the details in the narrative is amazing. As the saying goes, "although it is a micro-end skill, it is a top-level kung fu. "We might as well learn more about the writing methods of famous writers, extend the brush strokes to the depths of our hearts, and choose things that can touch our souls and touch our materials. Refine a fragment, a detail or a sentence to the "emotional point" of the exercise and write your true feelings. Teacher: Now we ask some students to read aloud and write their true feelings. The student's piece of work failed in the practice exam, and I walked home in frustration. I don't know how to face my mother who works all day. Although she didn't go to college, she knew the importance of reading. She loves reading very much and often tells me stories about famous people. In order to motivate me to study hard, in my mother's eyes, I am a good student, so she loves me very much. At the thought of this, my heart is pounding like a rabbit. When my mother saw my listlessness, she seemed to know my mind at once. She came up to me and gently stroked my head with her hand and said, "Don't be sad, I failed in the exam this time, and there will be another time!" "Cheer up and work harder in the future, ok? Mom believes you! " I feel a warm current flowing in.
3. How to write the true feelings in the composition Before you start writing, I emphasize again that you should write about your familiar life and express your true feelings. Suddenly, a classmate raised his right hand and asked seriously, teacher, how can I write my true feelings?
I am speechless, yes, how can I write my true feelings? Answering this question is far from being clear in one or two sentences. Education needs an opportunity. I clearly realize that now is a good opportunity for education. I can't prevaricate. That's dereliction of duty. Looking at everyone's eyes, I know they are equally confused about this problem. Dispel doubts-this is a good time!
Under everyone's gaze, I opened a classmate's composition book and said, "Please pay attention to these words":
"I think I should be able to live to 80 years old. If I can really share a part of my life, I am willing to give each of them 40 years of life and 20 years. They have spent so much effort to raise me, so what's the harm in giving my life to them? I have enough time to work for 40 years. "
This is a passage written by Xiao Wang, entitled "In fact, I don't want my grandparents to be old". Xiao Wang grew up with his grandparents when he was a child. Now, he sees two old people getting older and older. Their heads are covered with gray hair, with more wrinkles, less food and less neat walking. All this is painful in Xiao Wang's eyes, so he has the above sentence. Imagine, who can give his half life to others! The people who deserve our lives must be those who have given their lives for us, and we must have deep feelings for them. In this case, the written words are enough to have true feelings.
If we want to write true feelings, then we must be full of feelings for the object of writing.
I noticed that everyone, including the classmate who raised his hand, was very thoughtful and understanding. While everyone was writing, I browsed other students' compositions.
"The reason is a puppy that has been with me for three years. I remember the first time I brought it here, I didn't even open my eyes. Walking, shaking as if you were going to fall. Later, I got a little older and always ran around me. When I watch TV, it sleeps on my feet. He was very timid, afraid of a chicken I had at that time. I never worry that it will be eaten by Yuyou, because Yuyou runs away as soon as he sees it. I go for a walk in the morning. They follow me around and never run around. I trotted up and they ran together; I suddenly stopped, so I can stop without hesitation, and Chicken Dada always falls down because of inertia. At this time, Dada will act like a very angry person. I will laugh and stick out my tongue to show my happiness. "
Does this writing have true feelings? In my opinion, it counts. In the author's pen, Youyou and Dada became his two friends, with feelings, harmony, tacit understanding and rich life. With this foundation, the words written by the author will come from the heart. Reading such words, without any affectation, is simple and smooth, as if it were a sense of existence.
I've said this many times. If the words you write can be used for TV series, they are good words, because they are alive. Don't worry, movable type has real feelings.
Please read the following text again:
"Primary school is like spring, which gives you a comfortable feeling. You can play football during recess, and you have to do those annoying homework during recess. At that time, I was like a bird flying freely in the blue sky, like a happy little fish in the ocean, like a horse galloping freely on the grassland.
"If primary school is like spring, then middle school must be summer.
"In the middle school life like summer, I seem to be a person in the desert. I can't see green at first sight, and the right to life is no longer in my own hands. Free birds have become hunters' trophies, happy fish have become dried-up fillets on the beach, and galloping horses have become slaves of people. What makes me feel in summer is only fatigue. "
This is a passage from the kitten "I don't want to grow up". He has just entered the first grade, and his primary school homework is relatively easy. When I entered junior high school, my homework suddenly increased to seven, and my homework also increased a lot. Comparing the two, we naturally have a personal feeling. Make feelings concrete, with vivid metaphors such as spring and summer. Of course, these words also express my true feelings.
4. How can a composition write true feelings? 1. Careful observation is the golden key to improve your writing.
The article is the product of objective things reflected in the author's mind. To reflect the object, you don't have to observe the objective things carefully. Only by careful observation can we find broken jade from the mineral deposits of life phenomena and grab the shining treasure from the mixed sediment.
If you don't master "observation", the golden key to open the door, the "iron gate limit" of the composition will definitely be impossible. Second, reading more and reading widely is the premise to improve the writing level.
To write a good article, you must read more books. "Reading thousands of volumes, writing like a god."
"I am familiar with three Tang poems, I can't write poems and I can't sing." Mr. Lu Xun also advocates reading more books. "You must pick many flowers like bees, so that you can brew honey. If you bite in one place, your income will be limited and boring. "
We emphasize that we should not only read more, but also read selectively, and even more, understand the structural skills and language characteristics of the articles we read, and master the composition from them, so as to be more profound and diverse. Third, choosing materials skillfully and carefully is an accelerator to improve the writing level.
The requirement of material selection is novelty. The so-called novelty means that the batch should choose something that ordinary people have never touched, or turn a blind eye to it with profound meaning. Once the author writes in a book, it will make people think deeply about exciting materials.
The angle of material selection should be small, we should see the big picture from the small place and write the materials in everyone's eyes instead of what everyone wrote. To this end, we must compare, analyze and synthesize various materials in our minds, remove the rough and extract the fine, and transform and process them. Only in this way can the materials be novel.
And this kind of positive thinking and repeated deliberation is very helpful to improve the level of composition. Fourth, practicing writing often is the key to improve the writing level.
Want to enter the door of composition, make continuous progress, and more importantly, practice more. As the saying goes, "it is better to write one than to read ten articles."
This tells the truth that writing practice produces true knowledge. After learning an article, we understand the structural methods and writing characteristics of the article, so we must learn to use these knowledge and methods to practice and make it our writing ability.
In fact, we can all practice writing after learning the first text. However, fragment practice is a good way to practice writing, which takes a short time and achieves the purpose of practicing writing.
Keeping a diary is also an effective way to practice writing. Keep a diary every day, and then the Russian foundation will be solid. Fifth, diligent revision and repeated revision are the catalysts to improve the writing level.
Revision is an essential step in composition and an effective measure to improve the quality of composition. The predecessors said well, "the article is never tired of changing."
"The article has changed." Cao Xueqin wrote a dream of red mansions, read it for ten years, added and deleted it five times, and Tolstoy's War and Peace was revised seven times. Mr. Lu Xun advocated that "it is not a pity to read it at least twice after deciding and try to delete unnecessary words, sentences and paragraphs."
It can be seen that article revision generally refers to the process from the first draft to the final draft. When repairing, we should do five things: whether the text is fluent, whether the theme is clear, whether the structure is compact and whether the language is beautiful.
In short, "the article has changed." Generally speaking, the article is always getting better and better, so we should work hard on "revision".
5. The composition "Please choose the theme of' Cherish' and write the true feelings of' I'" has grown up, grown up, have I really grown up? What is growing up? Have your own little world? Do the housework that you can? Is it to shoulder the hopes of the whole family? Or give up the love you have occupied for many years to others? ..... The road to growth is vast, but there are too many things in my heart, ups and downs ... Some people say that growth is happy. Because when I grow up, I can be myself, do what I want, do what I want, and not be oppressed by my parents. Indeed, when I grow up and have my own small room, my parents can't control what I do in the room. I can draw some terrible pictures. I can play with some boring houses by myself and talk to myself, which is impossible; I can cry, I can scream, I can be angry, I can be moody, I can lie about my military situation; I can also play music tapes loudly and show my "wonderful" voice loudly ... here, I can fully release my emotions and turn anger into happiness. Happiness is actually everywhere, not so much meeting as looking for it, because the happy elf is by my side. If I do a little thing, my elders will be very happy and will say that I have grown up. At that time, grandma next door always praised me when she saw me, envied her having such a capable little helper around her, and blew me to the sky. Growth is happy, but it is also troublesome in many cases. That was not the case. The nasty thing happened again-I fell into the abyss soon after I "grew up". Alas, the tables have turned. When I grow up, all my love is given to me. At the same time, I am overbearing and I won't fight. Think about it, too. I used to be loved by thousands of people, but now I take turns listening to her. That's a tragedy! Seeing her saying "wind is wind, rain is rain", I have to put up with it for a while. When I grow up, I have more troubles than this. When I grow up, I am accepting the test of my parents' independent life in the future. I have to do my own laundry. After that, I have to ... Oh, my God! Whether the road to growth is happiness or trouble depends on yourself. I want to master the growing boat, so that it will not be ups and downs because of happiness and sink because of troubles! Answer the report. If you are satisfied, please use o (∩ _ ∩) o.
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