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General Comment: This paper records the scene of visiting zhenhai tower by changing scenery. In writing, the author captured what he saw and heard, and also wrote his inner feelings during the visit, which achieved the combination of dynamic and static, and truly showed the mood during the visit. However, there are many defects in this paper, as shown in this paper.
Commentator: Wu Xiaoting (senior primary school teacher) comes from: Complete Works of Composition Do you want to see (feel) the spectacular Yellow Crane Tower? Want to see (appreciate) the elegance of Yueyang Tower? Actually, you don't have to go too far (you don't have to go to Wuhan). There is another one in Fuzhou-zhenhai tower in Pingshan Park, which will also feast your eyes (experience the amorous feelings of the Yellow Crane Tower and the appearance of Yueyang Tower)!
Using the Yellow Crane Tower and Yueyang Tower to introduce the theme is like setting a suspense to attract readers' attention, and it also plays a role in setting off zhenhai tower in advance. However, attention should be paid to the accuracy of words and the completeness of narration. ) The weather in zw.liuxue86.com is exceptionally good today. My father took me to zhenhai tower, which I have been longing for for for a long time. We talked and laughed all the way and soon arrived at Pingshan Park. ), the four characters "Pingshan Park" on a vertical stone came into view. Aren't we going to zhenhai tower? Looking up, the peak is shaped like a big screen. I think that's how Hirayama got its name. Further on, it looks like a paradise, reflecting a piece of green. There is a little red dot in the lush forest, which seems to be on fire. A closer look reveals that these red dots are strings of small lanterns, like a procession waiting for inspection. The lantern on each tree seems to say to the tourists, "Welcome!
",and then added a lot of fun to me. Explain the weather and reflect the mood of the characters. But this article describes zhenhai tower, so the description of Pingshan Park downplays the theme. Pay attention to the key points in future exercises. ) After crossing He Zhong Road (along a road in the park), we climbed the stairs, and through the lush trees, we could vaguely see the figure of zhenhai tower. Above the screen, lying in front of (us) is a stone carving, carved with lifelike Shuanglong playing in the water. The two dragons intertwined realistically, making the water splash. This magnificent sculpture in front of us is really amazing. Looking up, the three characters of "zhenhai tower" with gold plating on a blue background stand out in the red walls and blue tiles, as if telling a long history. The red tiles are covered with roofs, and the golden Phnom Penh is particularly dazzling in the sun. It is so splendid. Entering the building, many rare treasures are displayed on the first floor. From the left, you can see the model of Zhenhai Tower, as well as big shells and mountains and lakes. There is a golden nanmu screen on the right, and two Brazilian amethysts are displayed next to it. I heard an old man say that zhenhai tower is also called Feng Shui Building. These two treasures are the treasures of the town building!
I couldn't help but look at it more. The display of many calligraphy and paintings opened my eyes ... We boarded the second floor, which was even more extraordinary. Looking from a distance against the railing, Fuzhou is full of high-rise buildings, scattered viaducts and a thriving new Fuzhou city. Move the scene, show the landscape of zhenhai tower through what you hear, see and feel, but pay attention to the conciseness of sentences and the concreteness of descriptions. For example, the model of Zhenhai Tower, "Golden Silk Nanmu Screen" and "Brazilian Amethyst" should be vividly written. A description like this paragraph can't make readers feel the grandeur and elegance of Zhenhai Tower, and of course it can't make people immersive. When I came to the square in front of the building again, I saw seven granite stone jars coming into my eyes. From a distance, they are arranged in the Big Dipper, so they are also called "Seven-Star Pot". (Take a closer look. ) They are round at the top and sharp at the bottom, much like gyroscopes, and there is a gossip beside them. These things are like a book, which seems to record zhenhai tower's weather-beaten. Draw the landscape of "the square in front of the building" to compare zhenhai tower. This visit to zhenhai tower really opened my eyes. If you don't see it with your own eyes, you will never be able to express your feelings!
What do you feel? !
The ending is too hasty to express clearly!
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