Suddenly, I found a very clear fingerprint on it! It is very clear on the surface of white flour steamed bread. Judging from the grain, it is "Luo", not "dustpan". It goes round and round, with a small inside and gradually expanding outward. ...
Poof! I dropped a bright tear on the bun in my hand.
Detail description takes truth as its life and comes from careful observation, repeated refining and processing of life. Details cannot exist alone, but always depend on other descriptions, such as the description of falling flowers in Xu Dishan's Falling Flowers.
Question 2: How to grasp the detailed description of the characters and write vivid composition descriptions? You can use some good rhetorical devices, such as metaphor, personification and exaggeration. You should describe this person more concretely, including his appearance, psychological activities, actions, what he experienced, etc., but pay attention to the details.
Question 3: How to carry out the teaching concept of detail description?
Through the usual practice and examination, I found that students can often collect materials when writing a composition, but in the process of writing, they don't pay attention to the description of details, which makes the article lack delicate and meticulous content, giving people the feeling of being careless and hesitant.
Detail description plays a key role in narrative writing, and true detail description is an important means to shape characters and realize typicality. "Good details can enhance the vividness and realism of the article, make the characters fuller, make the theme more convincing, make the article more vivid, feel the nuanced true feelings and make the composition more exciting.
Teaching objectives
Understand the significance and function of detail description.
Understand the skills of detail description through examples.
Guide students to observe life carefully and learn to describe details.
teaching process
Guide design
(Showing pictures of Li Yong, Fan Wei and Zhao Wei) How do you know them? Students answer (from looks, personal appearance characteristics, gestures on the stage. ) introduce the topic.
Second, the teaching process
1. Explain the significance and function of detail description.
Examples of teachers (students' works)
The boys in our class
Our class is a "land of geomantic omen" with abundant talents. Not to mention girls, only 29 boys have their own styles and stories.
The first sentence I introduced to you was-"I'd rather be cold until the end and let me forget ..." Look, he began to "practice" again. He is not tall, his eyes are not big, his hair is slightly curly, but his voice is very nice, and he has a wonderful performance at every party. He never stops singing after class. He is really a big singer. He often appears on the sports ground ... Xu Heyang, member of the Culture and Entertainment Committee.
"Oh, it smells good!" A smell of perfume came to my nose, and when I looked intently, Cheng, the head teacher of our class, came from far away. He has parted hair and a shiny head, as if he had just been licked by a dog. Usually, I always show the charm of "Ahn Jae Wook" with my head bobbing. If he comes to school on Sunday, you will find that his hair is very shiny because he sprays too much "bright hair". What, do you think he's bragging?
The third ambassador of our class appeared: He, Li Jiawei, too. Today, the math teacher checked his homework, so he had to pretend to rummage around in the table. Everyone knows that he didn't do his homework at all. The biggest feature of Zhu Xuehu is that he doesn't feel tired when he opens his mouth. No matter what others say, he always cuts in. He also likes to get stuck in his studies, and he can't get out every time he goes in. He is also good at blowing, often blowing small snails bigger than airplanes.
How's it going? How are the boys in our class? Want to know them? Then please come and visit our class, we will always wait for you!
After listening to this composition, the teacher concluded:
This composition written by Luan Chen uses a lot of details to describe the characters vividly, which makes the article lifelike.
Ask the students to find out the details.
Teacher: Raise your hand, bow your head and raise your eyebrows. In a word, you can show a person's image well. This is a detailed description, so what is a detailed description? As far as you understand it.
Life dialogue:
Teacher's summary: Detail description refers to actions, expressions and objects that play a special role in expressing the character and plot development.
Some concrete, subtle and vivid descriptions, including the environment.
Teacher: Let's look at the examples in the text first (computer display)
"I saw him wearing a small black hat, a big black jacket and a dark blue cotton robe, stumbling to the railway and slowly leaning forward. It's not difficult. But it is not easy for him to climb the platform over there when he crosses the railway. He climbed up with both hands, and his feet shrank again; His fat body leans slightly to the left, showing his efforts. At this time, I saw his back and tears quickly flowed down. "
Teacher: In this passage, the author describes my father's dress and posture when he climbed onto the platform to buy oranges, showing his deep love for me. It can give people real feelings and make the work more appealing.
For example, Tian Yu wrote, "Motherly love? In the article "Life": "She died and was crushed to death by the collapsed house. Through the cracks in the piles of ruins, we can see her posture of freezing to death: kneeling on her knees, the whole upper body crawling forward, her arms propping up the ground, but her body was deformed by the cement board, and under her body, a baby of three or four months old was lying unscathed in the propped gap. " Tian Yu described it in such detail that he left a rich imagination space.
Induction:
Depicting characters to express their character; Make the characters fuller and touch the scenery to set off the artistic conception ... >>
Question 4: Action detail description fragment 1. Wearing a small black hat, a big black jacket and a dark blue cotton robe, he hobbled to the railway and leaned down slowly without difficulty. But it is not easy for him to climb the platform over there when he crosses the railway. He climbed up with both hands, and his feet shrank again; His fat body leans slightly to the left, showing signs of hard work. Then I saw his back, and my tears soon flowed down. (Excerpted from "The Back")
2. Grandma Liu ... When she arrived at the Shishi in front of Fu Rong, she saw a sedan chair full of horses. Granny Liu didn't dare to go over, dusted her clothes, taught Banel a few words, and then slipped to the corner door. I saw a few people sitting at the gate, talking about the east and the west. Grandma Liu had to rub it up and ask, "It's a great blessing." (Excerpted from A Dream of Red Mansions)
He read sentence by sentence, and after reading one sentence, he drew a small circle at the back with a pencil. He doesn't browse casually, but thinks while watching, sometimes stops to think, and sometimes asks me a word or two. (Excerpt from a night's work)
When she saw another butterfly, she ran away playfully. Butterflies jump up and down. She stared at it intently. Finally, the butterfly stops on a flower. She stooped and stood on tiptoe carefully, sweat dripping from her face. She crept up to the butterfly, suddenly bent down and held the butterfly on the flower with both hands. Carefully put her hand out of the seam and leaned her head against it. She accidentally let the butterfly fly out of her hand. She pursed her mouth in a hurry and anger, put her hands on her waist, but immediately jumped up like a deer and chased another target.
5. Xiao Yan rolled up his sleeves and rolled up his trousers. She moved slowly in the stream, raised her left foot slightly, took a small step forward, and dragged her right foot forward slowly, as if wearing a thousand-pound shoe. She twisted her hat, hunched her back, lowered her head, narrowed her eyes, and her hands seemed to be holding something. At this time, she stopped, stopped looking around, stared at a place on the right, and suddenly reached into the water with a small fish in her hand.
6. She picked up chopsticks, reached into a brightly colored plate, gently picked up a piece, put her left hand under the chopsticks, and walked carefully along the chopsticks. The veins stood out suddenly, and the veins stood out for a while. She put the dish in her mouth carefully and tasted it carefully.
7. Grandma stretched out her right foot and slipped into the shoe. Her bulging hands clung to the door frame and gently lifted her left foot. The tight foot is carefully inserted into the shoe mouth, and then plunged into it. Then she stomped a few times to make her feet comfortable and went out contentedly.
8, near, near, the team leader finally came to his side, like a Taishan standing in front of him, shouting: "Hand in homework, hand in homework!" He smiled "hey hey", his expression was so funny and mysterious. Suddenly, he plunged into it, broke away from the leader's arm like a slippery loach, and his feet ran away like oil.
9. At the crossroads, there was an old woman with a slight hunchback and a slight fat body, struggling to walk on the empty road with an umbrella. The wind came at me with heavy rain. She bent forward hard, grabbed the umbrella, stepped back half a step and staggered forward.
10, the young man ran well, and he had sprinted from the beginning to run at a constant speed on the way. He ran with his head held high like a pony: his stride was symmetrical, his stride frequency was compact, his pedaling was strong, and his waist was relaxed-the whole movement was elegant and elastic.
1 1, Xuan Shi's steps are even, his arms are swinging back and forth, and his steps are getting faster and faster. He leans forward as if he were going to fall, struggling to run forward quickly. At the end of the race, she held her head high and stood out, and finally won the first prize.
12. In the first winter training of Lang Ping's volleyball career, the coaches began to give Lang Ping a "small stove". Long-distance running-Lang Ping runs around the 400-meter track ... his head is swollen, his chest hurts, and he can't lift his legs. Can you stop? Don't! The brain gives clear instructions and moves on ... Sweat has wet the hair into locks, and the sweat flows from the forehead to the mouth, which is bitter and astringent. How I want to lie on the runway at once and stretch my limbs to relax! Suddenly, a strange smile climbed up the corner of her mouth ―― she suddenly remembered that when she was a child, she always looked forward to tasting the taste of not jumping again, but now she really tasted it, bitter and astringent.
13. When the gun rang, the two girls rushed forward like arrows. Their movements are coordinated and powerful, flying briskly on the ice, just like two swallows flying close to the ground, and you can't give in to each other. Finally, the enthusiasm of the coach and the audience ... >>
Question 5: How to describe details (1) Choose typical details.
The more detailed the description in the article, the better. Detail description should grasp typical details, but choose something that is representative, general and can reflect profound themes. Only in this way can it be more extensive and help to highlight the center of the article, thus leaving a deeper impression on people.
(2) Observe carefully
To make the description vivid, we should mobilize our senses and observe things very carefully in the process of observing things. Everyone has different personality characteristics, so everyone will express his personality in different ways when he speaks or does things. What we have to do is to observe carefully and then accumulate it as writing material. That's what people do. When describing landscapes and objects in detail, we should grasp the characteristics and changes of the scenery.
Detail description should obey the needs of the performance center.
(3) Try to make the details meaningful.
Detail description is a way to see the big from the small. Although the details are light in weight, they are large in capacity. When we choose the details, we should start with the details, focus on the big picture, see the big picture from the small, and let the small details reflect people's ideological situation and social outlook.
(4) The detailed description must be typical and true.
The so-called truth means that the detailed description can accurately and vividly reflect the characteristics of people in real life. The so-called typicality refers to the details described, which are widely representative, and can reflect the general and the whole picture through individual and small things, and reveal the essence through phenomena.
(5) carefully temper the text.
In the description of details, we should choose the right words to get twice the result with half the effort and even convey the spirit word for word.
(6) Clever use of rhetoric
The use of figures of speech, such as metaphor, personification and exaggeration, can enhance the vividness of language, turn abstract into concrete, and turn intangible into tangible.
In short, although the details are very small, its role should not be underestimated. Good detail description can make the characters vivid and enhance the authenticity, vividness and appeal of the content. Detail description is a point in the scene, without which there is no scene; It is also a bead in the plot, without which the plot will not be coherent.
Observe things carefully
Question 6: Grasp the action and describe a sentence in detail. His eyes are chapped and his fists are clenched. Obviously, he has lost his anger.
Question 7: How to teach detail description? Through the usual practice and examination, I found that students can often collect materials when writing a composition, but in the process of writing, they don't pay attention to the description of details, which makes the article lack delicate and meticulous content, giving people the feeling of being careless and hesitant. Detail description plays a key role in narrative writing, and true detail description is an important means to shape characters and realize typicality. "Good details can enhance the vividness and realism of the article, make the characters fuller, make the theme more convincing, make the article more vivid, feel the nuanced true feelings and make the composition more exciting. Understand the significance and function of detailed description of teaching objectives. Understand the skills of detail description through examples. Guide students to observe life carefully and learn to describe details. How to know Li Yong, Fan Wei and Zhao Wei by designing a lead (showing their pictures) in the teaching process? Students answer (from looks, personal appearance characteristics, gestures on the stage. ) introduce the topic. Second, the teaching process 1. Clarify the significance and function of detailed explanation. Teacher (student practice) For example, "Boys in Our Class" Our class is a "land of geomantic omen" with abundant talents. Not to mention girls, just 29 boys have their own styles and stories. The first sentence I introduced to you was-"I'd rather be cold until the end and let me forget ..." Look, he began to "practice" again. He is not tall, his eyes are not big, his hair is slightly curly, but his voice is very nice, and he has a wonderful performance at every party. He never stops singing after class. He is really a big singer. He often appears on the sports ground ... Xu Heyang, member of the Culture and Entertainment Committee. "Oh, it smells good!" A smell of perfume came to my nose, and when I looked intently, Cheng, the head teacher of our class, came from far away. He has parted hair and a shiny head, as if he had just been licked by a dog. Usually, I always show the charm of "Ahn Jae Wook" with my head bobbing. If he comes to school on Sunday, you will find that his hair is very shiny because he sprays too much "bright hair". What, do you think he's bragging? The third ambassador of our class appeared: He, Li Jiawei, too. Today, the math teacher checked his homework, so he had to pretend to rummage around in the table. Everyone knows that he didn't do his homework at all. The biggest feature of Zhu Xuehu is that he doesn't feel tired when he opens his mouth. No matter what others say, he always cuts in. He also likes to get stuck in his studies, and he can't get out every time he goes in. He is also good at blowing, often blowing small snails bigger than airplanes. How's it going? How are the boys in our class? Want to know them? Then please come and visit our class, we will always wait for you! After listening to this composition, the teacher concluded: Luan Chen wrote this composition with many details, which vividly portrayed the characters and made the article vivid. Ask the students to find out the details. Teacher: Raise your hand, bow your head and raise your eyebrows. In a word, you can show a person's image well. This is a detailed description, so what is a detailed description? As far as you understand it. Life talk: Teacher's summary: Detail description refers to some concrete, subtle and vivid descriptions including actions, expressions and object environment, which plays a special role in expressing characters' character and plot development. Teacher: Let's look at the examples in the text first (computer display). "I saw him wearing a small black hat, a big black jacket and a dark blue cotton gown, stumbling to the railway and slowly bending down. It's not difficult. But it is not easy for him to climb the platform over there when he crosses the railway. He climbed up with both hands, and his feet shrank again; His fat body leans slightly to the left, showing his efforts. At this time, I saw his back and tears quickly flowed down. " Teacher: In this essay, the author describes the dress and posture of my father when he climbed onto the platform to buy oranges, showing his deep love for me. It can give people real feelings and make the work more appealing. For example, Tian Yu wrote "Motherly love? In the article "Life": "She died and was crushed to death by the collapsed house. Through the cracks in the piles of ruins, we can see her frozen to death: kneeling on her knees, the whole upper body crawling forward, her arms propping up the ground, but her body was deformed by the cement board, and under her body, in the propped-up gap, a baby of three or four months old lay unscathed. " Tian Yu described it in such detail, leaving a rich imagination space. Induction: Depicting characters and expressing their personalities; Make the characters fuller and touch the scenery to set off the artistic conception ... >>
Question 8: How to describe details with details means to grasp the subtle and specific typical plots in life and describe them vividly and meticulously, which is embodied in the description of people, scenery or scenes. Details include language description, action description, psychological description, appearance description, expression description and scenery description. Detail description is the most vivid and expressive method. It often tells the truth, goodness, beauty, falsehood and ugliness of characters with wonderful pen and ink for readers to appreciate and evaluate. Only by writing a composition can you write an article that satisfies yourself and touches others.
Hope to adopt. Thank you.