A good article is not achieved overnight, but revised repeatedly. After primary school students write their compositions, teachers should guide students to revise them repeatedly.
Only through repeated revisions can we write concrete, vivid and vivid articles and really improve our writing ability. Therefore, I attach great importance to students' own revision of articles in teaching, and cultivate students' habit and ability to revise articles.
In order to effectively guide students to revise their compositions, I mainly train in the following four aspects: 1. Stimulate their interest in review, generate strong motivation and form a good habit of consciously reviewing. Interest is the best internal motivation.
In composition teaching, I list and analyze the advantages of my own revision of composition, and stimulate students' strong desire to consciously revise composition. I said to the students: "Mr. Lu Xun once regarded' read it at least twice after writing, try to delete unnecessary words, sentences and paragraphs without regret' as an important writing experience."
Introduce the allusions of Jia Dao, a poet in the Tang Dynasty. Through vivid examples, the students in our class have been mobilized to revise their compositions, and formed the habit of consciously revising their compositions.
Second, put forward revision requirements, guide revision methods, and cultivate students' ability to revise their compositions. 1. Teach students common review symbols, and let students use appropriate symbols in review.
2. Define the modification requirements and guide the modification methods. For the composition of senior primary school students, first of all, it is required that the writing is concrete and substantial, the language is fluent and clear, and it is plain and simple.
On this basis, it is required to write vividly, that is, to seek "similarity" first and then "good". (1) The sentences should be fluent, the content should be specific, the sentences should not be broken, and the key objects should be described in detail.
For the sick sentences and broken sentences in the article, students should be instructed to use a variety of senses to participate in the description of unspecified things, observe them repeatedly from multiple angles and levels, grasp the characteristics, and change the details, so that the revised article sentences are smooth, there are no typos and punctuation errors, and the key objects of description and narration are concrete and true. (2) To revise the composition, we should also guide students to consider the deepening of the theme, the choice of materials, the adjustment of structure and the scrutiny of words.
First of all, the thought should be healthy, and the theme should be clear, in-depth and novel. The theme of the article is the soul of the article. It is necessary to guide students to seriously revise articles with unhealthy thoughts, unclear center, poor excavation, unclear expression and lack of new ideas.
Secondly, the choice of materials should be reasonable. The viewpoint of the article and the selected materials must be unified.
Views dominate materials, and materials express opinions. If the article only has opinions but no materials, or has materials, but it can't properly reflect the opinions, it must be revised. Third, adjust the structure appropriately.
The structure of the article is the organizational form of the article, and the level, paragraph, transition, quotation, beginning and end are all structural problems. If the hierarchical paragraphs are not clear, the transitional care is not good, the beginning and end are not ideal, and the details are inappropriate, we must seriously revise them.
Finally, we must scrutinize the text repeatedly. Language is the expression of ideological content. If you want to write well and change well, you must make the language accurately and vividly express the ideological content, which must guide students to scrutinize the composition repeatedly and carefully, and delete, change, adjust, change and add inaccurate and redundant words and phrases.
3. Combine reading with reform, and promote reform by reading. Reading aloud is the sound of written language.
Reading the composition aloud is helpful for senior pupils to find out the shortcomings in the composition. Silent reading can be repeated in time, which is conducive to students' thinking while reading and can make students think about modifying the content.
So when reviewing, I ask students to combine reading aloud with silent reading to find and master the best time for reviewing. Generally, students are required to read aloud twice with emotion first, and make marks in time during the reading process to indicate the places to be revised, and then modify them; Then read silently, think while reading, and change.
After several revisions, read it aloud to other students, and ask other students to revise it, and make new revisions according to others' revisions and their own ideas. 4. It is required to expose the revision process and understand its thinking change process.
In order to cultivate students' ability to modify their behavior, I ask students to write a composition directly in the composition book without making a draft, and write a blank line. Generally speaking, they should make careful corrections after writing, but students are also allowed to make corrections while writing. Therefore, students are required to write clearly and neatly, so that students can see clearly, and they are not allowed to scribble or alter.
In this way, the composition given to me will not be copied, from which we can see what the students thought at first and how they revised it later, which is convenient for analyzing the changing process of students' thinking when writing.
2. How to revise the composition? 65,438+00 junior high school composition needs the guidance of teachers, and students draw lots to approve each other. Everyone should write ten comments in the composition book. The average student's comments on a composition are above 150 words.
After many corrections, students can not only remember the basic requirements of writing accurately, but also understand these requirements more and more deeply. He will instruct others how to write and how not to write, which will naturally enhance his writing ability.
1. See if the format is correct. Look at the composition format first. If the format is correct, write the comments in red. Approval is based on deduction method. If this item is not deducted, it is a perfect score.
Friendly reminder: this item can be subdivided into title position, first and last lines, beginning of paragraph, number of paragraphs, number of words in full text, etc. Everyone can see whether the paper is neat or not. When underachievers correct other people's compositions and point out that the papers are not neat, they should also pay attention to the papers next time.
Friendly reminder: this item can be subdivided into defacement and writing quality. Anyone with a neat face, refreshing and pleasing to the eye, and beautiful writing style should be affirmed.
3. Look at the typos and find some typos. Mark the typos in the original text, write them in the comment, and then write the orthography at the back. If typos are found, 1 point will be deducted for every two, and1point will be deducted at most.
If it exceeds 10, no points will be deducted, but it should be corrected one by one. Friendly reminder: We should cultivate the good habit of looking up words in the dictionary frequently, write less and don't write typos, and enhance our ability to distinguish typos.
4. Look at some sick sentences. Pick out the sick sentences in the composition, underline them and write down where they are sick. Then, in the comments, write down a few ill sentences and correct them at the eyebrow eye or the original sentence. Subtract 1 to 10 in each sentence, and do not subtract any more.
Friendly reminder: you should cultivate the good habit of diligent deliberation and summary in your usual composition, avoid the occurrence of sick sentences and enhance your ability to distinguish them. 5. Look at the use of punctuation marks and emphasize the use of periods, quotation marks, exclamation points and question marks.
If obvious mistakes are found, one point will be deducted, and more than ten points will not be deducted. Friendly reminder: accurately remember the writing form and usage norms of punctuation marks.
6. Look at the article center. When guiding composition, give specific examples and tell students what is clear and what is centralized. Before the students correct, the teacher will read a few articles, then briefly introduce two good articles and give two examples that are not prominent and not important. Students can draw inferences from the positive and negative examples given by the teacher, and those that conform to reality can be recognized.
Friendly reminder: we should combine the excellent texts in our textbooks to deeply understand and grasp the concepts of salience and centralization of the center. 7. Looking at the material selection of the article, this comment puts forward three requirements: ① Whether it is around the center.
(2) Whether it conforms to the reality of life. ③ Whether it is typical.
Friendly reminder: the materials are true, typical and meaningful. 8. Look at the structure of the article and write three comments: ① Are the paragraphs at different levels clear?
② Whether the transition is natural. ③ Whether the beginning and the end are coordinated.
Friendly reminder: the structure is reasonable, and the innovators in form should give affirmation. 9. The expression of the article mainly depends on whether the expression of the article meets the requirements of the article genre and whether it is flexible. Narrative is mainly narrative, expository is mainly explanation, argumentative is mainly discussion.
Friendly reminder: those who are flexible in expression, detailed and complete in narration, concrete and vivid in description, accurate and clear in explanation, lyrical and natural, and rigorous and profound in discussion should be affirmed. 10. Reading the language of the article mainly depends on whether it is concise, fluent and accurate.
If the language is not concise, repetitive and verbose, the penalty will be deducted as appropriate, and this item will not exceed 5 points. If the language is not fluent, it does not mean that there are sick sentences, but the cohesion between sentences is not coherent, and the deduction will not exceed 5 points.
Friendly reminder: those who are rich in vocabulary, vivid in image, sincere in feelings, diverse in sentence patterns, novel in rhetoric and concise and coherent in expression should be affirmed. The last five requirements are 10 to improve the score, and there is no specific regulation on the score reduction, so the reviser will handle it as appropriate.
Special suggestions for composition in examination room: title drafting, first and last paragraphs, transitional paragraphs and first and last sentences of paragraphs are the places that marking teachers pay more attention to. For these places, we should raise the requirements according to various standards, be especially careful and try not to make mistakes. This article is quoted from /tb? Id=299 133 How to revise the composition is the last step in writing, and it is also a very important step.
But some students despise this step and even give it up, which is very bad. Think about it, which great writer's works have not been revised? Some have to be revised several times.
Mr. Lu Xun once said that after writing an article, you should read it at least twice and try to remove unnecessary words. This is one of the tasks to be done in review.
As a middle school student, shouldn't the composition need to be revised? To modify an article, we must also master certain methods, often starting from the content and language. Generally, there are four kinds of content modification: reading, deleting, adding and correcting, while language modification is generally to modify defective words, words and sentences to make them more literary.
Let's talk about the revision of the composition from two aspects: content and language. First, the revision of the content of the article (1) After reading and writing the composition, you should read it at least twice as Mr. Lu Xun said.
If it's a weekday practice, it's best not to watch it right away. Because you have just finished writing your composition, you still have a "thinking inertia" in your mind. If you find fault, you will miss a lot.
After a few hours or days (not too long, of course), it will be better to finish other things and go back to reading. If you are writing in the examination room, it is best to check other topics on the Chinese paper before reading the composition.
But you must read it. If you can, you'd better read it first, just like reading other people's compositions. By reading aloud, you will feel that your composition language is catchy but not catchy. Generally speaking, if it is not catchy and awkward to read, there must be something wrong.
After reading aloud, you should read silently, understand the "taste" of your composition from the aspects of conception, material selection, structure and language, and try to find out the faults of your composition according to your language level, and then delete, add and correct it according to the following methods. (2) There are generally four situations that need to be deleted: 1,.
3. Modify the sick sentence The following is a composition fragment written by a classmate. Read the prescribed revision symbols carefully. No, Zhang Qiang studies hard, but he is good at using his brain. His grades have improved rapidly, so he studies hard. In the morning, he takes time to read Chinese and recite English all year round. He always recites the text that the teacher asks him to recite. In the evening, he often does a lot of math and physics exercises, so ordinary problems can't beat him. He always finishes the homework assigned by the teacher carefully, and his homework is not sloppy at all. ⑤ When encountering a problem, don't be ashamed to ask questions and ask the teacher for advice until you understand it. He often helps his classmates overcome difficulties in study and never makes trouble. Once he made up lessons for a sick classmate and didn't go home until after ten o'clock in the evening. His hard work has brought gratifying results. His grades are among the best in his class. Teachers and classmates all praised him as a studious and excellent student. "But good at thinking" in ① should be changed to "So he studies hard" in ② should be changed to "Because he studies hard". Besides, he is good at thinking. He studies very hard. In the morning, he took time to read Chinese and recite English all year round, so his grades improved rapidly. He always recites the text required by the teacher. In the evening, he often does a lot of math and physics exercises, so general problems are difficult for him. He always finishes the homework assigned by the teacher carefully, and is not careless at all. Until he understood. ⑦ He often helps his classmates overcome their learning difficulties and never makes trouble. Once he made up lessons for a sick classmate and didn't go home until ten o'clock in the evening. His efforts have brought gratifying results. His grades are among the best in his class. Teachers and classmates all praised him as a studious and excellent student.
4. How to write an article entitled "Revise the Composition"? A good article is not achieved overnight, but revised repeatedly. After primary school students write their compositions, teachers should guide students to revise them repeatedly. Only through repeated revisions can we write concrete, vivid and vivid articles and really improve our writing ability. Therefore, I attach great importance to students' own revision of articles in teaching, and cultivate students' habit and ability to revise articles. In order to effectively guide students to revise their compositions, I mainly train them in the following four aspects:
First, stimulate the interest in review, generate strong motivation, and form a good habit of consciously reviewing.
Interest is the best internal motivation. In composition teaching, I list and analyze the advantages of my own revision of composition, and stimulate students' strong desire to consciously revise composition. I said to the students: "Mr. Lu Xun once regarded' read it at least twice after writing, try to delete unnecessary words, sentences and paragraphs without regret' as an important writing experience." Introduce the allusions of Jia Dao, a poet in the Tang Dynasty. Through vivid examples, the students in our class have been mobilized to revise their compositions, and formed the habit of consciously revising their compositions.
Second, put forward revision requirements, guide revision methods, and train students to revise their compositions.
Ability.
1. Teach students common review symbols, and let students use appropriate symbols in review.
2. Define the modification requirements and guide the modification methods. For the composition of senior primary school students, first of all, it is required that the writing is concrete and substantial, the language is fluent and clear, and it is plain and simple. On this basis, it is required to write vividly, that is, to seek "similarity" first and then "good".
(1) The sentences should be fluent, the content should be specific, the sentences should not be broken, and the key objects should be described in detail. For the sick sentences and broken sentences in the article, students should be instructed to use a variety of senses to participate in the description of unspecified things, observe them repeatedly from multiple angles and levels, grasp the characteristics, and change the details, so that the revised article sentences are smooth, there are no typos and punctuation errors, and the key objects of description and narration are concrete and true.
(2) To revise the composition, we should also guide students to consider the deepening of the theme, the choice of materials, the adjustment of structure and the scrutiny of words.
First of all, the thought should be healthy, and the theme should be clear, in-depth and novel. The theme of the article is the soul of the article. It is necessary to guide students to seriously revise articles with unhealthy thoughts, unclear center, poor excavation, unclear expression and lack of new ideas.
Secondly, the choice of materials should be reasonable. The viewpoint of the article and the selected materials must be unified. Views dominate materials, and materials express opinions. If the article only has opinions but no materials, or has materials, but it can't properly reflect the opinions, it must be revised.
Third, adjust the structure appropriately. The structure of the article is the organizational form of the article, and the level, paragraph, transition, quotation, beginning and end are all structural problems. If the hierarchical paragraphs are not clear, the transitional care is not good, the beginning and end are not ideal, and the details are inappropriate, we must seriously revise them.
Finally, we must scrutinize the text repeatedly. Language is the expression of ideological content. If you want to write well and change well, you must make the language accurately and vividly express the ideological content, which must guide students to scrutinize the composition repeatedly and carefully, and delete, change, adjust, change and add inaccurate and redundant words and phrases.
3. Combine reading with reform, and promote reform by reading. Reading aloud is the sound of written language. Reading the composition aloud is helpful for senior pupils to find out the shortcomings in the composition. Silent reading can be repeated in time, which is conducive to students' thinking while reading and can make students think about modifying the content. So when reviewing, I ask students to combine reading aloud with silent reading to find and master the best time for reviewing. Generally, students are required to read aloud twice with emotion first, and make marks in time during the reading process to indicate the places to be revised, and then modify them; Then read silently, think while reading, and change. After several revisions, read it aloud to other students, and ask other students to revise it, and make new revisions according to others' revisions and their own ideas.
4. It is required to expose the revision process and understand its thinking change process. In order to cultivate students' ability to modify their behavior, I ask students to write a composition directly in the composition book without making a draft, and write a blank line. Generally speaking, they should make careful corrections after writing, but students are also allowed to make corrections while writing. Therefore, students are required to write clearly and neatly, so that students can see clearly, and they are not allowed to scribble or alter. In this way, the composition given to me will not be copied, from which we can see what the students thought at first and how they revised it later, which is convenient for analyzing the changing process of students' thinking when writing.
5. The composition of revision and masterpiece should specifically understand the meaning of "revision and masterpiece". Writing about autumn is a sign of aging, so is the idiom "old-fashioned autumn".
However, on the other hand, it is a symbol of maturity and old age, and it is an external manifestation of coldness and vastness; It is the autumn moon, and the magpie bridge flies; The maple leaves rustle, and Qiu Chan is silent. At this moment, the leaves have completed a reincarnation, giving themselves to the earth and to the stout roots, which is pregnant with a new round of maturity and harvest in the transformation.
Therefore, autumn is the love of fallen leaves for roots and the yearning of geese for the sky; The dedication of autumn is selfless, and the realm of autumn is far-reaching. Pastoral poet Wang Wei lives in seclusion in the mountains, poetry, calligraphy and painting, and meditation. Every time he said, "I will walk until the water stops me, and then sit and watch the rising clouds", his feeling about autumn is unforgettable and simple. His physical state is natural, his image is ethereal, his feelings and scenery are harmonious, and his eyes are mountains and rivers, that is, the mountains and rivers in his heart, that is, the mountains and rivers in his image.
His groups of landscape poems are landscape paintings, which are fascinating to read; Yes, God swims with everything; Goods, always, people and books are old. An autumn night in the mountains: an empty mountain after the rain, standing in the autumn evening.
Moonlight in the pine forest, crystal stone in the stream, bamboo whisper when the sweeper comes home, lotus leaf in front of the fishing boat. Spring spring might as well give it a rest, and the autumn sun can stay on the hills for a long time.
The poet was deeply impressed by the distant and empty autumn scenery, full of Zen and longing, the bright moon in the pine, the clear spring on the stone, the sound of bamboo and the joyful girl, the lotus movement and the fishing boat. Is it a poem? Is it painting? Is it Zen? It seems that it is not all.
This is a quiet picture of a paradise, intoxicated by it, relaxed and happy. This autumn land with beautiful poems and paintings is enough for a noble prince and grandson to linger. Four seasons have the characteristics of four seasons. "Spring is full of four seasons, Xia Yun has many strange peaks, the autumn moon shines on the ground, and Dongling is lonely."
I love autumn alone, and autumn is memorable. Compared with spring, autumn is solemn and quiet, compared with summer, autumn is pure and transparent, compared with the ethereal illusion of winter, autumn is heavy and inclusive.
Autumn is a season full of personality. Autumn is an artistic conception of a withered vine and a faint cry. Autumn contains a sad song of death and rebirth. Autumn is the hometown of passionate talents and the background color of hazy poets. When spring stretches out the arm of languid and soul-breaking, when the lofty sentiments of summer quietly go away, the winter night is as quiet as a dream. Only in autumn, in the face of ups and downs, it is full of emotion and soul shock, without regret and consternation, without stubbornness and weakness, savoring a touch of sadness, swimming in a crumpled silence, and dispelling the frivolity of spring and indiscretion of summer with your vastness. The silence in late autumn is
In autumn, I sing for each of your fallen leaves! Autumn, I applaud your aging! Autumn, I am heartbroken for every detail of you! Autumn, a toast to you! Brave for you.
6. Talking too much about the basic methods of revising the composition will only be too complicated.
I quote a sentence from Bai, hoping to help you.
"Composition is to say what you think, and say what you say."
The purpose of the revision is to improve it on the basis of the original, but if the original is dog tail grass, I don't think it is possible to make a rose without wisdom, no matter how to "add, delete, change, adjust, change and stay" ... Of course, I'm not saying that my Taoist friend is not good, I'm just making a supplement.
A good composition major often does not need to be revised, because it has already melted into the author's mind.
In short, the composition depends on words, on the expression of true feelings, not on revision.
7. Revise the writing experience and write a short essay on this topic, which makes me understand that the team is a collective. If the people in the group unite as one, then this is a hard team. If it is like a loose sand, it will affect the team. I firmly believe in helping each other and caring for each other. One day, everything I learned in the military camp will play a role, and the army leaders and instructors will give me the opportunity and happiness of this exercise. But now that we're in the barracks, we have to do everything ourselves. And I will finish washing in 10 minutes, and I have learned a lot. If you want to make your life more comfortable, you should arrange a lot of things properly and don't let your temper get confused.
I deeply realized the taste of the library. Get up at 6: 30 every day without scratching. I want to thank my parents for being cruel to us students who love to sleep late, and we have accomplished it as a task. Morning exercises and evening exercises every day make us very tired. In short, I am very happy to share my experience with you here. The first time I entered the military camp, I realized the seriousness of discipline for the first time. The first time I felt the scorching sun, the first time I felt the downpour, and the first time I lived according to the regulations ... Many firsts were born in our military camp life.
I am a child who is not spoiled by my parents. From small to large; Swarms of mosquitoes attack me at night; Sitting slowly will also be punished by the instructor.
The first time, a kind of tacit understanding, a kind of unity, is an attempt, including Jiaozi. I tried, and I am very happy! It taught me to do a lot of housework, stand firm and try not to move, eat regularly, no conditions!
Military training here is strict, the instructor's words are orders, and we must obey them. It brings me a military temperament: I always walk on my high horse, which makes me feel serious and nervous. We have team spirit; Still have to do standard training and so on. These are all very annoying. I found that self-reliance is not that simple. I have to learn everything from scratch. Songs and other projects make people feel very comfortable and happy. Everyone lives together and cooperates with each other, which makes me develop a good quality of unity. Play martial arts boxing, dance, report and rest everything.
The full military life also gave me comfort.
Here, shoot the target
8. How to modify your composition Modifying an article can be divided into two steps: the first step is to "find fault"; The second step is "operation".
"Finding fault" can be checked from the following aspects according to the writing requirements: first, whether the topic is correct, second, whether the center is clear, third, whether the material is typical, fourth, whether the content is specific, fifth, whether the level is clear, sixth, whether the sentence is fluent, and seventh, whether the punctuation is correct.
"Operation" is to modify the problems existing in the article. According to the size of the original "fault", it can be divided into two types: major change and minor change.
Major revision means that the whole article is flawed, such as deviating from the theme, unclear center, improper details and so on. , need to be rewritten.
Minor changes are mainly to correct language problems by adding, deleting, modifying and transferring. Specifically, "adding" means enriching the content of the article and adding necessary words. "Delete" means deleting redundant words, words, sentences and paragraphs, and making the repeated contents and wordy sentences concise and clear. "Change" is to change unreasonable and fluent sentences into reasonable and fluent sentences. "Mood" means making necessary adjustments to the unreasonable structure and incorrect word order of the article.
In addition to mastering the above methods, we should also pay attention to the following points when revising the article:
One is the combination of the whole and the part. The whole and the part are interrelated and inseparable. Modifying the theme depends on whether the materials in each part of the article can fully express this center; To modify a sentence, we should start from the needs of the whole article and analyze it in the specific language environment of the whole article or paragraph.
The second is the combination of modification and observation. The problems found in the revision may not all be solved by "reasonable imagination", for example, the content is not specific and the materials are inaccurate, which often requires further observation. Through further investigation, observation and analysis, more specific and accurate materials can be collected, thus solving inaccurate and unspecific problems.
The third is the combination of self-improvement and asking for help. The revision of the article should be based on self-revision. But when you encounter problems that you can't solve in the process of revision, you can also ask others to help you revise them. If you can read the manuscript to others, ask them to express their opinions so that you can be inspired and then modify it.
9. Regarding the revision of the poems in the composition, the composition should be revised repeatedly, describing the famous sentences or 1 that have been revised repeatedly, and the article has taken pains to revise and scrutinize the good sentences repeatedly.
Wang Anshi's sentence "Spring breeze is green in Jiang Nanan" is quoted in the classic. When writing the sentence "Spring breeze is green in Jiang Nanan", a word "green" was repeatedly scrutinized and revised, from "to", "blowing", "passing", "coming" and "staying" until it was satisfied with the word "green", so it is a famous sentence that has been passed down to the present.
2. If you want to be born when you write, you will take the initiative to grind it. Deliberate poetry is good for practice, especially parallel language. Lou focuses on "Jiang Cixi's kindness".
If you want to write like the wind, you must hone it every day. Deliberate thinking makes the poem lean and the couple handsome and neat.
3. "Ten years of study, five additions and deletions", "Every word is like blood, and ten years of hard work is extraordinary"-Cao Xueqin.
Cao Xueqin was born in Nanjing and lived a rich life as a teenager. At the age of thirteen, the year after the Cao family was copied, the family moved back to Beijing, and their wealth dropped sharply. Since then, Cao Xueqin has lived a hard life. It's extraordinary that you have worked hard for ten years. This masterpiece exhausted his life's hard work, but before the book was finished, he fell ill because of the sudden death of his beloved son, and "died in tears", not yet 50 years old.
4. Throughout the ages, whatever is well written has probably been revised. -He Qifang
The moral is to tell us that constant revision is the ladder of our progress.
5, don't rush to write, don't hate to modify, but rewrite the same thing ten times, twenty times. -lev tolstoy
This story tells us not to rush for success, but to be calm, step by step and strive for perfection.