After reading it, I suddenly realized that it was really good! "The emperor is not in the dressing room, but in the study" is very classic, and it is also clear that "water can carry a boat and overturn it", which is well known to all women and children. Generally speaking, it's good. However, if you can write your child's words more naively and appropriately, it will be in line with your child's identity. Looking forward to seeing your revised works! Your writing style is very good, with clever ideas and fresh ideas, which makes people feel suddenly enlightened after reading it, but in the end, after the emperor read the child's letter, the turning point was too sudden and not specific enough. It would be better if you could give full play to your own ideas, patiently structure it, and write it in detail after reading the letter, so as not to be wordy and empty.
It is a bit contradictory that a simple letter can make a stupid king wake up all day. Nothing is difficult in the world, but if you put your mind to it, plus your genius, I believe it will be more exciting.
Your composition is 1, continuing the emperor's new clothes. When the emperor came back from swimming, he knew that people were talking about him wearing nothing, so he was very angry and sent for the "Royal Weaver Girl".
2。 After a while, the "royal weavers" came and the emperor asked them, "How do you explain what people are talking about?" The weavers said, "Your Majesty, because your people are stupid, you can't see this dress, but you are extremely smart, so you can see it."
In order to prove his innocence, he has to make another dress, which only ambitious people can see. "The emperor was glad to let them do it quickly.
3。 A month later, another military parade began. The emperor paraded in the street in this dress. The minister and the people all pretended to be surprised and said, "Why did the emperor wear clothes?" Everyone knows that as long as someone says how beautiful this gorgeous dress is, the emperor will behead him as a traitor.
4。 The emperor returned to the palace and received a letter: 5.
Amy, maybe you are in the dressing room. I just want to bother you for a few minutes. You are like a big ship, and we ordinary people are sea water. We can hold you high, but we can also drown you. I hope you can be a good emperor and let us hold you forever.
6。 A naive child.
The emperor was very moved after reading it, and began to concentrate on governing the country and exiled the weavers. Since then, people have always said that the emperor is not in the dressing room, but in the study.
My comments are-a. Advantages: 1.
The first, second and third paragraphs are closely related, concrete and attractive. 2。
The central sentence of the article "The emperor is not in the dressing room, but in the study" is very good. B.
Disadvantages: 1 The fifth paragraph is out of touch with the above paragraphs.
The above is "clothes". This passage suddenly talks about the relationship between the emperor and the poor, which seems unnatural. In fact, this passage can completely express the meaning of "we can drown you, too" I hope you can be a good emperor, let us always support you "by talking about clothes." Of course, it is not easy to write this passage well.
2。 Paragraph 7 Why did the emperor suddenly like the study? There should be other language transitions here, otherwise the article will look unnatural.
D. consider the following words: ①.
Why don't you change "then" to "right away" Because changing it to "immediately" can highlight the imperiousness and impatience of the emperor.
2. It should be "you".
③. The word "everything" should be changed to "only".
This paragraph is accurate and good.
⑤ "in" should be "again".
2. Continuation of "The Emperor's New Clothes" The continuation of the emperor's new clothes
Since the emperor put on "new clothes" at the celebration, there has been an "atmosphere" in the court. The emperor himself treats his "new clothes" carefully with magical power every day, and his ministers are even more afraid of themselves, and no one dares to make any noise.
In winter, in order to commemorate the ancestors and pray for national prosperity and security, the emperor will go to the temple for sacrificial activities before the New Year, with the participation of civil and military ministers and empresses, which can be called a grand ceremony. On the day of the celebration, everyone put on thick winter clothes to keep out the cold because they were going to a temple far away from the city to hold a ceremony. The emperor made careful preparations for this grand ceremony. Of course, we must put on this "new dress" to attend this grand ceremony. The mighty guard of honor, civil and military ministers crowding around, the emperor dressed in new clothes, sat majestically in the carriage and waved to the people on the roadside frequently. In fact, he was soaked to the cold and longed for the damn celebration to end as soon as possible. However, after all, it is the middle of winter, dripping into ice and freezing people. The emperor was quickly frozen, his face gradually lost its ruddy color, and frost slowly formed on his eyebrows and beard. When he finally arrived at the temple, the emperor went into the temple very happily, hoping that it would be warmer in the temple. Worshipers greeted the emperor at the door. The high priest began to preside over sacrificial activities. The emperor sat in a big marble chair, and the ceremony was tedious and lengthy. Slowly, the emperor lost his intuition. He subconsciously picked up his clothes and hugged them tightly, hoping to leave the heat on him. But his consciousness became more and more blurred, and he gradually wanted to sleep. In a daze, he met his father and mother They came to pick him up and take him to a far away place. The emperor felt that he was flying slowly, while holding his beloved dress tightly with his hands.
The sacrificial ceremony was still going on, and everyone felt very cold, but they were afraid to speak. In addition, the emperor will also examine the loyalty and wisdom of his courtiers through such sacrificial activities. Two royal tailors were among them, and it was unbearable cold. They stole a look at the emperor, only to see that the emperor was expressionless, his eyebrows and beard were covered with frost, and his arms were tightly hugged ... When they saw this, they sneaked out of the temple and were defeated.
After the sacrificial ceremony, everyone hoped to return to the palace as soon as possible, but only the emperor sat there motionless and straight. The queen came to call him, only to find that the emperor was frozen stiff. Since then, the emperor has never seen that magical "new dress". He was locked in the harem forever by the emperor and will never be born. As for the two tailors, they were finally caught by the emperor's guards and executed on charges of deceiving the monarch.
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3. Follow-up composition of the emperor's new clothes 1. The discussion made the emperor lose face, so he had to complete the military parade in frustration and embarrassment.
When he returned to the palace, the emperor thought: I thought it was very proud to show off new clothes at this military parade, but I didn't expect it to be like this ... The more the emperor thought about it, the more angry he became, and he sat down on the dragon chair and flew into a rage. "come on Bring me those two swindlers who knitted me new clothes! " "Hey!" As soon as the ministers heard the order, they ran to the weaving room, but after a while, they hurried back to the temple: "Report to your majesty, those two people are no longer in the weaving room."
"Where did they go?" "I don't know if it's small or not." "Probably ran away!" A minister said.
"Give me a manhunt in the city! I must catch them! " "Why! The little one will do it. " After a long time, the ministers came back panting.
"Kay ... report to your majesty, according to the officers and men guarding the city gate, these two swindlers have left ... the city where your majesty was marching." "Hang it all! They just cheated raw silk and gold, but they played with me. That's ridiculous. Let me catch it! Even if you have searched everywhere, you must catch them back! " "Hey!" After about two months, the two swindlers finally found their whereabouts, so the ministers sent officers and men to the palace to catch them.
The two swindlers were tied up and taken to the hall of the palace. The emperor was very angry when he saw them! "Bold fanatics! Dare to play with me! " "Your Majesty, this is not our fault." The liar replied.
"ridiculous! Is it not your fault, or is it my fault? " "yes! It is your own fault. " "Nonsense! How can this be my fault? " "Your majesty, if it weren't for your negligence of state affairs and your obsession with new clothes, how could we cheat your majesty? So, in the final analysis, it is your own fault! " The emperor made the liar feel ashamed, and only when he was told by the liar did he really realize his fault.
"Indeed, the old society was too deserted!" The emperor sighed. "I think you woke me up, so I won't kill you. As long as you hand over the raw silk and gold, I will let you go.
But you should also take a warning and never do this again. "The two swindlers quickly took out raw silk and gold from their pockets and fled the palace in a hurry.
Since then, the emperor has never abandoned state affairs. He keeps the affairs of the country in order, but he seems to have some nostalgia for new clothes. The emperor proudly completed the military parade with a big belly and returned to the palace happily.
Unexpectedly, a trusted minister said, "Your Majesty, forgive my rudeness. Those two weavers are liars. They cheated the emperor.
The clothes on the emperor are far less beautiful than before. "The emperor changed his previous arrogance and asked carefully," Really? What do you think of my skirt? " The priest said, "I dare not say.
I'm afraid I was wrong. The emperor said impatiently, "I forgive your innocence." Say it quickly. "
The minister said hesitantly, "I, I, I can't see any clothes." When this word came out, it set off a storm.
The emperor became angry from embarrassment: "Well, you big fool, how dare you call me naked." Like a street kid. "
Say that finish and kick him to the outside of the cloud nine. However, the emperor felt uneasy. He asked other ministers to put on this dress and have a look. They are all wearing the same clothes. At this time, the emperor gradually believed what the children and ministers said.
He sent several officials and ordered them to catch the two swindlers. However, the two swindlers have long since escaped.
Helpless, your honour had to report to me at the palace. The emperor said angrily, "then go to other countries to find it."
Despite the long journey, the police officers traveled around the world day and night looking for the liar. To save face for the emperor.
However, after a long time, there is still no news of the liar. The minister proposed another plan to the emperor. He said, "That child may be able to help us.
Let's invite him to have a look. "The emperor thought," Yes, that child can see through a liar, so he should be able to find a liar. "
So the child was invited. The child said, "They must be in the big forest near us.
Don't adults often say that the most dangerous place is also the safest place? "The emperor thinks it makes sense to be a child. So he sent a team of soldiers led by ministers and children to surround the forest so that even mosquitoes could not fly out.
Finally, the liar was caught here. Now, the whole country is busy.
The ministers put forward some suggestions. Some people said beheading for public, while others said letting him parade in that dress. The child said, "Let them know what it feels like to be cheated."
So, the child went to death row to see the liar. He said to the liar, "In a few days, the emperor will let you parade in that beautiful dress and then behead you."
But I can help you, but you have to give me all your property. The liar said, "Yes, as long as you can get out alive."
One night, after the child cheated all the ill-gotten gains back. When the soldier was asleep as the child said, the liar slipped out of the window.
Just as they were happy, suddenly an arrow came and hit a liar's foot. Before they could react, they shot thousands of arrows at once, and they realized that they had been fooled by the children. They had a good time. This is what happens to liars.
From then on, the emperor especially loved children, and children all over the country were his good friends. The emperor walked proudly in the sun, naked and trembling with fat.
At this moment, a naive voice turned around: "He is really naked!" " The emperor trembled as if he were afraid of the cold. After a while, he saw his head, dripping with sweat, his face was white and red, and his steps were a little faltering. After a while, the emperor straightened up again, straightened his stomach and walked proudly with greater steps.
Do you want to end this embarrassing scene as soon as possible, or do you want to show it to your majesty? We don't know. Soon, the emperor returned to the palace. He is soaked to the skin and ready to take a bath.
As soon as the emperor entered the bathroom, he was ready to take off his robe as usual, but he couldn't find the button to untie it. He was going to ask the servant to help him undress, but he thought, "I can't undress. I just can't untie my clothes." Then I am just a stupid and incompetent emperor who can't see the magic clothes. " , no, no, this is not let.
4. The composition continued to write "The Emperor's New Clothes" with 500 words 1. Ye Shengtao went on to write that the naked emperor was furious after being laughed at in the parade and announced on the spot: "Whoever speaks ill of you again will be executed immediately!" " As a result, forty or fifty people were executed on the spot. After that, the emperor put on other clothes. Once, his beloved princess accompanied him to drink, and casually said, "Oh, my chest is dirty!" " "On another occasion, a minister resigned and said," I don't need to see the emperor's clothes anymore. "They were all killed because they violated the emperor's ban. Once the emperor visited the capital, because there were more streets and more people laughing, and the emperor actually killed more than 1000 people. In order to change this situation, a kind old minister thought of a way and said to the emperor, "You always like new clothes. However, the emperor insisted that this magical dress would never be worn out and put him in prison. Finally, one day, the emperor wanted to kill the people, and everyone rushed to beat the emperor. Soldiers and ministers also tended to the people. The emperor collapsed when he was weak. So everyone elected innocent children as emperors to benefit the people! The emperor proudly completed the military parade with a big belly and returned to the palace happily. Unexpectedly, a trusted minister said, "Your Majesty, forgive my rudeness. Those two weavers are liars. They cheated the emperor. The clothes on him are far less beautiful than before. " The emperor changed his previous arrogance and asked cautiously, "Really?" What do you think of my skirt? "The priest said," I dare not say. I'm afraid I was wrong. " The emperor said impatiently, "I forgive your innocence." Say it quickly. " The priest said hesitantly, "I, I, I can't see any clothes." "This came out, it set off a storm. The emperor became angry from embarrassment: "well, you big fool, how dare you call me naked?" He asked other ministers to wear this dress, and they all wore the same clothes. At this time, the emperor gradually believed what the children and ministers said. He sent several officials and ordered them to catch the two swindlers. However, these two swindlers have already escaped. Helpless, the officers had to report back to the palace to me. The emperor said angrily, "Then look for it in other countries." Despite the long journey, the officers worked day and night. Go all over the world to find a liar and get back face for the emperor. However, after a long time, there is still no news of the liar. The minister proposed another plan to the emperor. He said, "That child may be able to help us. Let's invite him to have a look. " The emperor thought, "Yes, that child can see through a liar, so he should be able to find a liar." So the child was invited. The child said, the emperor thinks about it, and it makes sense to be a child. So he sent a team of soldiers led by ministers and children to surround the forest, and even mosquitoes could not fly out. Finally, the liar was caught here. Now, the whole country is busy. The ministers came up with an idea. Some said they would behead him, and some said they would let him wear that dress to the parade. The child said, "You'd better wear that dress." Kids go to jail and meet liars. He said to the liar, "In a few days, the emperor will let you parade in that beautiful dress and then behead you." But I can help you, but you have to give me all your property. " The liar said, "Yes, as long as you can get out alive." One night after the child cheated all his ill-gotten gains, the liar slipped out of the window while the soldiers were asleep, as the child said. Just in the middle of the liar's foot, before they could react, thousands of arrows were fired at once, and they realized that they were fooled by the children and were happy. This is what happens to liars. From then on, the emperor especially liked children, and children all over the country were his good friends. Two articles, I hope to help you.
5. Write a 500-word composition "The Emperor's New Clothes" with the theme of "The Emperor's New Clothes"
The military parade finally ended, and the emperor and his ministers returned to the palace.
"He really has nothing on!" The emperor's cries are always buzzing in his ears. The emperor was a little impatient. He called the ministers to the main hall.
Ministers looked at each other one by one, saying nothing, standing under the lobby, frightened.
The emperor asked, "What do you think of today's parade?"
The ministers said in unison, "Great, great!" Who dares to say "no"?
"So, is my new skirt beautiful?"
"Beautiful, gorgeous, exquisite, really beautiful, really beautiful, really a Chinese odyssey-
"Did you hear anything else?" The emperor asked tentatively.
"I didn't hear it, I really didn't hear it, absolutely not!" Ministers are eloquent, and some are patting their chests to show that their heads are secure.
"How do I hear a child crying ..."
Before the emperor finished speaking, the honest old minister said, "That's a silly child."
"Yes, yes, yes, that's a real silly child!" Ministers echoed loudly.
Another honest official came forward and said, "Your Majesty, do you think if the child is not stupid, can he say such stupid things?" ? He is a hopeless little fool. "
The emperor's doubts slowly disappeared in the rhetoric of his ministers. It seems to him that what people say is false; Since what people say is false, the new clothes they are wearing are real.
Thinking of this, the emperor was really happy, laughed heartily, stood up and said, "Good, good, good, good." What do you think of my new dress? "
"Good, great, great, great!" Ministers shouted happily, but snickered in their hearts, because they had another life-and-death difficulty.
6. "The Emperor's New Clothes Continuation" Composition The Emperor's New Clothes Continuation
When the emperor came back, he was furious and said, "Bring me the swindlers at once and let me discipline them well!" " In a short time, the liar was caught back. The king said, "How dare you! How dare you tease our king? Tell me what kind of punishment you want! " The liar said calmly, "Your Majesty, I don't think we are wrong! The emperor was even more angry. He was furious and said, "How dare you insult me so much and call me innocent? Do you want me to star in Foreign Kings? " The liar rolled his eyes cunningly and said, "Your Majesty, have you forgotten the characteristics of this dress? Only stupid people can't see this dress. Your Majesty, you are so smart, how can you compare with these ordinary people? " The king said happily, "Yes, I am so distinguished, how can I compare with these ordinary people?"? "Pass it on, as long as it is a resident of our country, or a person who wants to live in our country, as long as he can't see all the clothes!"
After that, the residents of this country are afraid to tell the truth. Guys, you lied to me, and I lied to you! Over time, it has become a country of lies! Will soon be extinct!
7. The emperor's new clothes continue to write a composition. People's voices are louder and louder. The emperor pretended to be calm, but he couldn't help shivering. The ministers behind him were also embarrassed. They continued to keep their heads down. The emperor walked faster and faster, and the ministers had to keep up quickly.
People laughed at the naked emperor, who blushed and shouted, "Shut up!" " ""Ha, is the emperor so like a clown? " "That's interesting, abolish the fatuous emperor! "The emperor was furious and went to the palace, leaving a group of people still talking." Somebody give me an explanation! "The emperor looked forward and glared at the silent minister below. The people below were silent and no one spoke.
"Go and catch those two fucking liars for me! Those who saw the liar playing tricks but didn't tell me were arrested and beheaded! " No one moved, and the people below bowed their heads. The emperor picked up a roll of imperial edicts he had written and threw it on the ground. He stamped his foot and shouted, "Nobody listens to me?" The ministers under the stage began to stir up. The ministers to be punished have good interpersonal relationships, and no one wants to offend them. On the contrary, the ministers suddenly began to shout, "Emperor, abolish it! Emperor, abolish it! The emperor ... "Other courtiers thought of the king's corruption and incompetence, and they dared to resist. For a time, the palace was noisy. What's more, they pushed the emperor forward, but his guards ignored him.
The emperor was overthrown, the crown on his head was taken off, the yellow robe was taken off, and the embarrassing generation of emperors was overthrown. A few days later, two swindlers were found, but when they fell to the ground in fear, the soldier respectfully said to them, "Congratulations, you have been appointed as prime ministers by the new emperor." The new emperor thinks your wisdom is useful as long as you serve the country well. "
Two liars, no, the two prime ministers were surprised, and their dumbfounded appearance was funny.
8. The emperor's new clothes continued to write a composition. Ever since the emperor was pointed out loudly by a child, the emperor has been covered with goose bumps and he is very angry.
He knew that this matter must not be spread, and the king's dignity must not be lost, otherwise he would not be able to manage a country. Strangely, for a long time, the emperor did not severely punish the two swindlers, but treated them more kindly every day.
The cold winter is coming, and it snows heavily on every street in the whole city. Transparent ice bent the thick trunk, and the whistling wind blew all over the field. At this time, the emperor saw two swindlers in the palace.
"Oh, my dear Sir, how are you?" The emperor smiled and said, "Thank you for your concern. We are fine. " They answered with one voice.
"You made me such a beautiful skirt that I had a satisfactory summer. In order to reward you, I decided to ... ""Your Majesty, I made two pieces. " One of them reminded me in a low voice, "Well, two tablets are better, just one for each person." The emperor smiled and said, "In order to reward your contribution, I have decided to appoint you as my inspector from today, to patrol the streets of the city once a day and put on the coat you made for me." "no! Don't! That's your majesty's specialty, and little people can't wear it. "
The two swindlers replied: "Recently, some citizens have disobeyed management, and there are many swindlers. As long as they put on my coat, they dare not call you liars. " The emperor said with concern, "well, now you can put on my coat and exercise your power!" " "Your majesty! Your Majesty! " They begged, and under the personal supervision of the emperor, the two swindlers put on beautiful "coats" and followed the emperor out of the palace in warm clothes. "I have prepared a grand inauguration ceremony. You won't attend it, will you?" The emperor asked with concern. "no! No! " The two swindlers spoke in unison.
At the inauguration ceremony, in less than ten minutes, two naked swindlers held their chests in their hands and trembled all over. "Are these two clothes still warm?" Asked the king. "Warm ... and warm. ...
Warm, "the two swindlers answered trembling.